Hell turn Dj Hayden great.
Born In Dallas, raised in Indianapolis. Been in Arizona now for three years.
Played basketball, football and ran track in high school. Played for division champion Ball State Cardinals from 2004-2009. Recruited as a safety then played two years at wide receiver. Graduated with a Bachelor's degree in Communication studies and focused on interpersonal communication and the art of persuasion. moved to Yuma, AZ where I worked construction for a year, where my family had relocated to. I applied for Enterprise Rent A Car where I was promoted to my own branch after a year. Relocated to Phoenix last year; promoted as a station manager for National Car Rental at Phoenix Sky Harbor Airport... Where I now Live, in Glendale, AZ. and now I'm a Raider's season ticket holder... finally
It was too much verbiage for a sports article bro... it seemed like you were trying to reiterate your skill in vocabulary instead of just getting to the point... it became boring etc...
And I'm not sure if you're trying to say something smart about me being a classy level headed mature fan... because if you are then you should have just let it go if you think it's a biased opinion... I obviously wasnt the only to notice... I didnt read the article because of it... don't plan on going back thru to edit it for ya... call it immaturity if you must...
But I'll call it reading articles that interest me... @Joshua Hayes
As a writer, I'm always open to constructive criticism, so I want to give you a chance to truly state your case to me. I yearn for improvement.
Judging from the comments below, you're clearly a level-headed, classy, mature sports fan, so I wanted to ask you directly to let me know which long sentence or period-less paragraph I could change for you to aid in your understanding of my article? Because, as I go back through, I see that there are some words longer than 5 digits and a few sentences that ask you to take commas into account, but nothing that most couldn't get through with just a little focus and basic, unbiased decency.
So, let me know where the issues are, and I'll work to address them...
And a woman by the way..
dude? what the fuck???? I got a life you know
i cant type lol
do u noot wanna talk to me?
and uve done music? thats sweet, if ya read my bio, music is my life lol gets me thru. thats how i express myself. wut kinda musix did u do?
well i just applied for my second time, wut sucks is ive written articles on here before, bur BR changed in my absence. i assure my articles are all original. too bad yer never on when i am. we coulld have wickedd convos. lol and sorry for blowing up yer BB there. i wouldve gotten back sooner too but i didnt know that u replied on yer own BB, thot ud reply on mine its fine either way tho