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I just finished and submitted your slideshow. Let me know if you have any questions.
I saw your message and just started editing your slideshow. Should be done in a little bit...
Sorry for the delayed response.
As I'm sure you've already surmised from the tremendous response, your piece on Ledecky-Ye was well-written, well-argued and, above all, thought provoking. You were able to strike at an important issue -- namely the role that jingoism plays in the Ye debate -- without making any incendiary accusations.
You simply laid the two cases side-by-side and let readers draw the obvious connections. Well done.
Two things to consider for the future:
1.) First person can be an effective stylistic tool, but don't overuse it. At the points where you're taking us through your thought processes -- i.e. "two things popped into my mind" or "I was happy for" -- the article starts to feel more like a stream-of-consciousness blog post as opposed to a composed piece.
2.) Come with some hard evidence. You're telling us that the responses to Ledecky and Ye were inconsistent with one another, but you don't cite any cases. And while I'm inclined to believe you based on my personal experiences, others may not. Find an article or two that support the claim. Slap a juicy block quote in there. Not only will that make your argument stronger, parsing the language of others could lead you to new revelations.
Hope it was helpful. You've got great talent.
You're welcome. It was needed for someone to point that out.
No worries. I figured that's what happened because you cited another link earlier in the article.
It can be as long as you want! The into slide must be over 300 words, that's it.
Good luck with your writing! Here are a few links to get you started:
Style Guide: http://bleacherreport.com/pages/styleguide
Style Clearinghouse: https://docs.google.com/spreadsheet/ccc?key=0AoTw9Kwt3agydDBkMTVqXzNmcHBDM0c3WkdtYlBKd0E&hl=en#gid=0
B/R dictionary: https://docs.google.com/spreadsheet/ccc?key=0AoTw9Kwt3agydHNHaEc3S0JjcGtWdXd3MU51ZjJxQVE&hl=en#gid=0
Hope that comes in handy!