Big time Raiders fan. Might write something occasionally but here mostly for my daily fix of Raiders new. Rumors, fact, speculation it's all fine with me.
Cory. I like what you write. Good ideas.
I'd encourage to to expand upon what you have next time. Give me more, flush out those ideas.
Normally I edit my own blog posts and Bleacher Report editors re-touch my articles on here, but they either didn't touch yours or did a poor job.
1) Online paragraphs should be short
2) Check the punctuation
3) Avoid using "I" even if you are a fan or expressing your opinion
4) Organize your ideas before you write and reorganize it after to make it easier to read.
Practice is key and Bleacher Report is a good avenue to use.
If you want to get a bit more serious consider looking into AP Style or taking a writing class (JC's are cheap) if you really want to get serious.
this might interest you :
you like history? :
hey i hav completely edited my article and it is new and improved read and comment please
You should read my new articles
i already put it up!