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Former NFL Guy with the scouting and coaching departments of Chiefs and Patriots. Spent two seasons with the Chiefs, four summers interning with the Patriots. Aiming to deliver insightful commentary, day-in and day-out.
Wow, and I even mixed up your name with the lady person I emailed...I wasn't kidding! I'm so sorry about that.
Jennifer, thank you for catching all those names. I normally triple check since I know names and I don't get along, but my husband's college graduation ceremonies were last night and early this morning (I'm writing this from my phone while i wait!) and we have a house full of in laws so I let it go this time...I'm so glad that I can count on you and the other editors to be so careful and helpful!
You're welcome, Field!
Hey Field, the picture seems fine to me. I'll let you know if it needs to be switched or not.
You're welcome, Field! Also, just a quick note. When you leave a note in the editing notes, the editor may not get it. So what we recommend is to leave it on his/her bulletin board or send a private message through the B/R messaging system. Feedback is very important to us as we always want to be able to respond and be accessible. Keep up the great work!
Howdy, tried leaving an editors note and I have a feeling my thoughts were too long, just wanted to leave some helpful advice on your manny piece:
Good read, very enjoyable. The question about why manny dons the dodger blue and jason bay is now with the red sox, that wasn't the question, the question was why did manny wear out his welcome. I tried to keep your voice as best I could but redo that section. You also have a tendency to place an "and" one point too soon in a sentence. Like if you're making 3 points, you say point 1 and point 2 then point 3, it comes off awkward. I have a little more room now, so I can really explain, you state "Manny was a detriment and the management didnt like him due to his bad hitting. Thats kind of a run on sentence or those should be reworded. Take some time to look at the editing sections on the site about prose and keeping things short and concise (as I ramble on). Also, I was a little lost at the point of "It is unfathomable to trade a player of his caliber and chalk the deal up to getting more value in return." I changed the wording a bit (again, I know, I'm sorry), but I think I left the intent alone. I think you need to try to get to the point a little better there overall in that paragraph though on whether you are talking about numbers or a player's marketability to an organization, because I felt a little lost and the article wanders a bit there. Also, when you're not sure of affect/effect, here is a handy tip, use the word impact. I do it all the time when I don't feel like stressing out over it. My mom was an english teacher and I have been traumatized by this stuff am im not 100% sure, but I think it should be affect, so I changed it. Feel free to change back anything you'd like or rearrange what you want. Hope you enjoy. Peace and Love
thanks for the vote
get some articles posted bro!