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3 months ago
Hey, I'm not working in firefox today so here's some editor's feedback.
Nice recap! I tweaked your headline and teaser, did some work with your paragraphs (separated them and reordered one for continuity), and edited for style. Make sure everything checks out to your liking—keep up the good work!